Oh, okay. That explains it. I didn't remember Leslie Neilsen being in it, though.
Oh, okay. That explains it. I didn't remember Leslie Neilsen being in it, though.
Welcome FloYo and nice art!
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Nice! Moke, that's FloYo.
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And FloYo is my girlfriend. She also did the bulk of the work on that Puck and Hawkeye page I posted earlier.
Wow! Such varied opinions. This is definitely refreshing to see. Also, I'm flattered that you consider Florence and I on a similar level. I have one year of school and she's finishing her third. Anyway, I can't tell you guys how much I appreciate that you all actually have opinions. So nice to see.
Oh we all have opinions, trust me. (A word of advice though, don't let Florence in on the "similar level" thing or you may be sucking up for awhileOriginally Posted by GingrBeard
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Haha naw, she acknowledges that I'm better in some area's but not in most. She wouldn't be offended.Oh we all have opinions, trust me. (A word of advice though, don't let Florence in on the "similar level" thing or you may be sucking up for awhile
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Support Artists, Not Companies! Creator-owned comics are where the real art is at!
My new website! http://lifelessordinarywebnovel.com/home.html Follow my super-powered web-novel adventures, "Life Less Ordinary"!
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That is a great drawing, FloYo. She looks like she'd fit into Byrne's Alpha Flight quite well.
~ Le Messor
MAN: "What's the idea putting your hand in my pocket?"
Chico: "Just a little mistake. I had a suit once looked just like that, and for a moment I thought those were my pants."
MAN: "How could they be your pants when I've got them on?"
Chico: "Well, this suit had two pair of pants."
~ Monkey Business
That's pretty cool.
Have you considered using instruments - say a French curve or an ellipse template - to get a smoother line on things like the Tower?
~ Le Messor
"All those who believe in psycho kinesis, raise my hand."
Ok here are some criticisms but sent by an admirer of your work so don't get all RPLASS RAGE please!
I think the picture lost the concept of foreground/background. The figures in front fail as foreground figures for facing away from the reader, and the background figure, Storm, fails for being too small. The central element is the Sentinel, but he's so far away and has no sense of threat to him.
To improve, make the Sentinel scarier, attacking, moving, threatening, with hands up about to blast. Storm much bigger. Guardian and Cyclops a lot closer to the Sentinel and facing the reader. Make the foreground the characters and the background the Toronto skyline. If you're going to use a city skyline as a background, that's great but put in more buildings and more city. Finally, that mixed case text in Cyclops' speech bubble - change that to a hand drawn allcaps font or download a comic font and reprint it in all caps and with some ooomphasis. Refer to UXM #109 how JB put a speech bubble on the front cover of a comic and use that technique. Oh and add in more Alpha Flight members.
Please take this as constructive criticism, but I agree with Rob. I'd also look at Alpha #43 - don't copy it, but be inspired by it - for ideas of how to get characters as big as Sentinels to interact with characters the size of, say, Northstar.
I might look at putting a more suspenseful speech bubble on the cover. The one you've got reminds me of AF (original series) #1, and that's cool - but that probably won't work on the Toronto X-Men. Try something that makes the heroes look like they're in danger.
Please note: we're being critical (again, constructively, I hope) because this is for a competition, and:
We want you to WIN!
Also, more Alphans!
~ Le Messor
"Experience is something you don't get until just after you need it."
Thank you! Thank you! I'm an artist, I can take constructive criticism and even some advice and I thank you for all of it.
Some things are meant to be how they are, like the Sentinel not being scary. It's supposed to look like he's calling for help or is just dying slowly and pathetically. The sad expression and the out stretched arm indicates that for me and is further emphasized by the foregrounds characters lack or worrying and Cyclops saying that Storm's got it. The buildings? I used a ruler on the straight edges and fudged the perspective a bit. I'm new to drawing buildings and structures in general. I am more of a character kind of guy. Lately, I've decided to kick my own ass into doing bigger, better things and this is the result. This is the baby, the first steps to getting better. I am taking on buildings, large characters and multiple characters in one scene. The perspective on the lit up building on the left is off. The lights don't follow it correctly, instead they keep to the same view all of the way down the building and I know that when I drew it. Something to work on for next time. Hopefully there won't be a dead line. Another issue I know exists is that building in between Cyclops, Guardian and the sentinel. I didn't add windows so it just kind of looks awkward. Next time, I'll remove anything like that and clear a line of sight and see how that works.
Honestly, I don't think I'll win because there are a few people who actually go to school for this stuff who are entering but it isn't about winning for me, it's about having an excuse to push myself a little more. Thanks for the advice guys.
The instruments were more for the saucer section.
Why in particular were you going for a vulnerable Sentinel idea? Sounds like a cool idea.
~ Le M
"Half the people you know are below average."
You always see them looking either terrifying or destroyed. I wanted to go for something a little funnier. The tone was supposed to be kind of light. You have a giant sentinel that is normally scary and it looks like Storm is just toying with it and both Guardian and Cyclops don't seem to care that it's there by their calm poses and Cyclops' dialogue.
P.S. Florence, my girlfriend, won the contestBy the looks of the other covers, I'd be in at second but maybe that's just me. That Wolverine one is an awesome drawing (better than mine even) but not very cover like in my opinion. Here's a link to the covers that were submitted. Florences is the X-Men in a band. Clicky!
Anyway, thank you all for the feedback and let me know which covers you would have voted for and in what order. BE HONEST!
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